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  i began by taking a psychology class each semester. during my second year at clu, i was given the opportunity to volunteer at camarillo state hospital on the adolescent girls' ward in the mountain valley school. working with these children, who were diagnosed with either worried or emotional disorders, was eye opening. i had never been inside a mental hospital before. it was like a fantasy camp, everywhere i turned i saw mad little adoloscenes, lo-li-tas as nabakov would call them. i almost became institutionalized myself as my infatuation with the little girls was driving me crazy. although i was satiated there, it was too overwhelming for me so i decided that working inside an institution would not be a future goal of mine.